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In
a
series
of
hic
coughs

prot
o
words
stretch
halfway
to
a
thought
re

tract

to
almost
ism
ish
ness
just
shy
of

fact

no
pal
imp
sest
evolves
no
trace
no

track

just
free
fall
shudder
fade
to

black

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anselmo_b
Oct. 3rd, 2008 05:17 pm (UTC)
Nice poem, I like the way it flows, and I like the way the syntax enhances the meaning too.
dyvyd
Oct. 3rd, 2008 11:08 pm (UTC)
Thanks,
what I liked about your verse was the effortless freedom of it. Obviously you
can just turn on that mode of thought-- so why not book length?
Epic!
anselmo_b
Oct. 7th, 2008 05:21 pm (UTC)
Apparent effortlessness is perhaps the greatest compliment for verse of all. But I'm afraid I am still very far from getting there yet. Right now I am happy when I manage to make things sound in a manner that I do not hesitate too much to call 'my voice'. I thank you very much for this note.
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